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As in topic - can someone with high English skills check grammar in this quote:


"Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath, after entering the top of the mountain."

The first clause is has a misplaced comma, and the word order is awkward.

Incorrect: "Bitcoin for the current financial world, is like a deep breath..."
Correct but awkward: "Bitcoin, for the current financial world, is like a deep breath..."
Better: "For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like a deep breath..."

The last clause is grammatically correct, but "entering" is the wrong word. To "enter" something means to go inside it, not on top of it. A better word would be "reaching".

There should be no comma before the last clause unless you mean that before reaching the top of the mountain, Bitcoin is not like a deep breath (which makes no sense).

Putting it all together:
"For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like a deep breath after reaching the top of the mountain."

Thank you very much!

You are magician!

Tip sent! ;)

Oh can i have one more little question?

Followers
Followings
(it's about twitter)
Followers thats are thoes people who are watching me.
But Followings?

Users that follow the specific account.

Users the specific account is following, or to put it in other words, those users the account is a follower of.

Thank you Lutpin. I was not sure if it means that "is already following" or "will be following".

You're always welcome! ;D

I was going to say that, but I can't type so fast.

Those commas don't need to be there. Commas are mostly used for conjunction sentences, before words like and or but, so there is no need for them there even if you want the reader to read it slowly.

I think comma before word Bitcoin is ok. When i read that, little break in this moment sounds good to me :)

Is it "You're always welcome!" or "Your always welcome!"? (think: Your Welcome.)

I think this works:

   "Bitcoin is a deep breath of fresh air from the top of a mountain for the current financial world"

However, I might write the following for more tactility:

   "Bitcoin is like the fresh air taken in a deep breath after reaching the summit of a Himalayan mountain to our current financial world."

That sux ^^^  ;)

How about

The financial Bitcoin world is a mountain top with no current fresh air to breathe. Derp.

Been wanting to touch up on my grammar and how I write. Do any of you have suggestions of sites to practice the basics and develop from there? Drives a bit wonky when I look at lines of spew and no real control of what I am stating.

Maybe Lynda or the Khann institute as examples.

Instead of reaching you can say , after reaching at the top ...

Entering is not a valid word here as explained in above posts .

Doggerel (http://www.poetryfoundation.org/learning/glossary-term/doggerel) much?

Doggerel Haiku:

   Orange Bitcoin
   Honey Badger Attack
   HODL!



How's that for a first attempt?

It's not just okay, it's mandatory. "For the current financial world" is a non-restrictive clause (you can remove it without changing the meaning of the rest of the sentence), so it must be separated with commas.

Think: "My welcome!" (sentence fragment) or "I am welcome!"?

Haiku was my first choice, but upon Googling...

BTW, you're missing two syllables.

   Orange Blossom Bitcoins
   Honey Badgers Attack
   HODL!

"For the current financial world, Bitcoin is like having a deep breath after arriving on the top of the mountain".

Just trying if it makes sense.

Thank you to tell me about it, actually i really don't know Bitcoin's mean. 

Thank you  ;D

I think it should be:

"Bitcoin, for the current financial world, is like a deep breath after entering the top of the mountain."

I'm from England, that's how we learn it anyway.

That is the main caluse of the sentence, as you can tell it can stand alone.

We can then embed this subordinate clause that doesn't make sens on is own, but in the sentence, it fits well.