That is pretty good but it is a kind of western style. A lot of people draw like this, I don't mean to say the art itself is bad, but it's in a different style from what I am looking for.
I know what you mean don't worry
That's interesting you should say that, I guess what I'll do is draw from reference more to match the style you're talking about, I think the problem is that I've been learning how to draw realistically you see if you checked out my photobucket account, been practicing that tons so I can get my proportions correct. I'm still kind of getting used to the manga style. What I'll do is carry on with that sketch I showed you and see if I can't get my drawings to look more like what you're after.
Also, Ghost in the shell ftw!