feedback on bitcoin related cover letter

[hdbuck]

hello,

I am currently applying for a job opportunity at Coinbase but, as my native language isn't english, i would like to ask for your feedback regarding my cover letter since i want it to be as perfect as possible!
many thanks

[bitcoiner49er]

Applying for a job opportunity in your company was a though call since it is quite a different career path that the one I was training for (ie. Investment and Banking). But the glimpse I had of it during my previous internships didn’t satisfied me and it was all before becoming the “bitcoin maniac” I am now. By the way, my mom thinks I am crazy.

I think you meant, tough.

[hdbuck]

Applying for a job opportunity in your company was a though call since it is quite a different career path that the one I was training for (ie. Investment and Banking). But the glimpse I had of it during my previous internships didn’t satisfied me and it was all before becoming the “bitcoin maniac” I am now. By the way, my mom thinks I am crazy.

I think you meant, tough.

yup thx

[shawshankinmate37927]

I am thrilled to have the opportunity to apply for a job within what I believe will be one of the most deserving businesses for the next century. Indeed, I found Bitcoin to be a challenging and stimulating technology, which is pretty much what I was looking for to built on a thriving career. So, as Coinbase emerged as one of the leading companies amongst the Bitcoin sphere, it became obvious for me to take a shot at it.

Should read "build".

Also, are you still a student in graduate school or did you graduate?

[shawshankinmate37927]

I am thrilled to have the opportunity to apply for a job within what I believe will be one of the most deserving businesses for the next century. Indeed, I found Bitcoin to be a challenging and stimulating technology, which is pretty much what I was looking for to built on a thriving career. So, as Coinbase emerged as one of the leading companies amongst the Bitcoin sphere, it became obvious for me to take a shot at it.

Also, I would change the word "amongst" to "within".

[hdbuck]

I am thrilled to have the opportunity to apply for a job within what I believe will be one of the most deserving businesses for the next century. Indeed, I found Bitcoin to be a challenging and stimulating technology, which is pretty much what I was looking for to built on a thriving career. So, as Coinbase emerged as one of the leading companies amongst the Bitcoin sphere, it became obvious for me to take a shot at it.

Should read "build".

Also, are you still a student in graduate school or did you graduate?

thx

i graduated last year from Bath university (in the UK) and am now finishing my internship (in may) in the VC fund i am talking about in the letter. so i am preparing the next step of my career which i would very much like to be a big dive in Bitcoinland