Just updated the OP again to reflect the new official logo along with the new token request procedure.
You have it all polished up, looking very nice.
Maybe add a bold a line linking to a page showing how to buy NEM for potential buyers that stumble across the thread. We should make it obvious in our main thread where to start, it might help with some confusion. If I were an "outsider" looking to invest, after briefly scanning the main thread my first thought would to see
"How to claim a NEM stake" and go to the token request page. Then I would be confused.