Written article for Silver Circle - feedback requested

[evoorhees]

Hi all,

I've been asked to write a piece about Bitcoin for the movie blog of Silver Circle (upcoming animated film about a dollar collapse dystopia =)

My working draft is posted on my blog here: http://evoorhees.blogspot.com/2011/06/bitcoins-and-separation-of-money-and.html

The intent is to be an overview of Bitcoin and introduce more people to the currency. I tried to avoid too much technical jargon, instead focusing on the big ideas. It will likely expose at least a thousand new people to Bitcoin once posted at the blog.

Would appreciate any of your comments/criticism on the piece. I wrote it pro bono, but production costs included lots of Starbucks =) If you like the piece and would like to contribute to my coffee fund, my address is 19aStAAG6q5LyknKvHzAdWGm47bQuaC4Vd

Also, please don't repost this anywhere just yet. Once it's officially published, then I'm happy for it to be distributed elsewhere - just please hold for now.

[error]

"no transaction cost" - not always true. Perhaps you should say "minimal transaction cost" or something else.

"it's" and "its" - you should check these; I found an instance of them being reversed.

No mention of transaction processing. I like.

[evoorhees]

Bump... any other comments before this goes live?

[MacFall]

I wish you wouldn't capitalize "government". 

Other than that, I think it could use a bit more emphasis on the fact that bitcoin could make banks totally obsolete, except for risk-takers who hold interest-bearing accounts.