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April 03, 2013, 03:35:52 AM |
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I started to read the article and part of the way through, found one typo as I did:
Typo: 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence: "respond" should be "respend"
and before I got too much further in, then the question occurred to me: Who is the intended audience?
Are you targeting this to prospective miners and people who would be more interested in the technical intricacies of Bitcoin, or people who may have never heard of Bitcoin before and are looking to get educated, or somewhere in-between?
I think the answer to this question will further guide the type of feedback you may receive. There is a lot of technical information here and as someone who has been mining (unfortunately only) since Jan 2012, I am looking forward to reading this fully when I am less tired and have a better attention span. That being said, if your audience is for anyone non-technical or interested, I fear you may lose them too early.
A boss that I worked with for many years helped me become much more terse and focused in my written communication. She would often say things like: "This is a good start. Remove the last 2 sentences of the first paragraph, delete the last two paragraphs and send it." When reviewing what she stated, I would re-read the sections she suggested removing and they were almost always either too technical for the audience or, more often, just unnecessary or overly verbose.
I hope this doesn't come across too critical. That is not my intention. Based upon the 'audience' question above, I'll be happy to provide additional feedback if you would like, and lastly, I appreciate the time and effort that it took to put this together. Thanks for your efforts.
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