First: Unless you're running a local proxy, the URL should be that of the pool you are mining for. I would suggest that you get CGminer working first, pointing it directly at the pool's URL.
Second: The majority of mining pools don't use the 8333 port for the Stratum protocol (you should confirm the correct port).
Third: You should never paste a screenshot showing your password in clear text
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