I won't charge you anything to read it and give you my opinion (although I'm busy for the next week or so working on a Whitepaper and Whiteboard animation video).
You may be interested in how I'm working with a current client, though. I suggested I interview them to understand their product better, then read their paper. This led me to make 2 recommendations:
1. Their paper's Abstract should re-written (to improve the wow factor)
2. Reading grade level needs to be reduced
NOTE:
A high reading grade level (Flesch-Kincaid) uses bigger words and longer making the paper longer and harder to read. Should be grade 8-10. If it's grade 12 you've got a problem. Ironically, the lower the grade level the harder it is to write.
You can check reading grade level with MSWord Spell checker, or paste text here
https://datayze.com/readability-analyzer.phpYou can read some of my interviews here (reading grade level is typically grade
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https://medium.com/blockchain-trailblazers