To all: please do not send me an identical copy of the same essay, or send it both to my inbox and to this thread. It's too much work to sort through duplicates
Magic: I'm only considering the last private message versions; too many versions for me to keep track of.
Essay 1 - The opening and concluding sentences are great, but I'm having trouble following your argument. Is this your outline?
1. factory-style murder
2. taking advantage of others' good-will, and stabbing them in the back
3. magnitude of human suffering
If so, please revise your essay with a couple sentences emphasizing that so I can easily follow it. Then .75 bitcoins.
Essay 2 - This one is not as good. The middle section is a list, which is not essay format. I'm confused by the statistics you give in the final paragraph. According to this (http://www.feldgrau.com/stats.html
) Germany had 66 million people, not 6600 million people. Please include a foot note with a source for your numbers. I think what you're trying to argue in the first paragraph, is that you or I or anyone else would have turned out the same way if subjected to the same conditions as a child. That's fine, but include another sentence or two to really emphasize that. Please revise and resubmit.
Essay 1 - This is a good quality essay. No need to change it, but you essentially blame all of these evil things upon Hitler himself, where in reality, it could not have been carried out except by the help of people "just doing their job" such as the Nazi secret police, bureaucrats, and other officials. I'm intrigued by the Hitler-babies you mentioned, as I've never heard of this before. If you can provide a source, the .75 coins are yours.
Essay 2 -This is the one you messaged me. It is not in essay format.
The few sentences you posted on the thread will not cut it.
Essay 1 - From your message, cite your sources please. According to this (http://www.feldgrau.com/stats.html
) Germany had 66 million people in 1933. How could there be 140 million people in the Nazi party? In the first paragraph, are you arguing that he is a conniving weasel, who will switch tactics when necessary to advance his evil plans? This essay is decent, but it fails to answer the question why. Why is it bad that he attacked the soviet union (perhaps because this was betrayal?)? Why is it bad that all these people were killed (was it self-defense?)? Why is it bad that he tried to have power over all of Europe like the European Union? Include a few more sentences in your essay to make sure you answer why? and .75 bitcoins are yours.
You sent me two messages containing the same essays... I'm just going to delete the first message and work off the second since they look identical.
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Cheng and Anna: You've both used this format for your essay, with these headings:
Are you following some sort of essay format? This seems very odd to me for an original essay.
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