I hit your personal Inbox the very 1st time asking you to show me how it should be written but instead you kept stating your opinion. you're ALL TALK! dude at the end of the day your opinion got you wheres it gotten you and thats legenday on a forum... it made enough sense for you to put time into an opinion lol!
I explained the core mistakes you made (both in marketing and later in your whitepaper). I'm not your freelance whitepaper writer nor am I your employee - it's your responsibility to write a proper whitepaper and if it's crap, it's my freedom to criticize it.