I read both articles and from a readers perspective it's a bit too bulky. I would suggest you shorten your paragraphs with less detail.
We get bombarded by 1000's of articles each day from many different blog's / forums / websites and most people only browse through these articles quickly.
Write the article and then proof read it, as if you were a busy person browsing the internet. Most people have a short attention span, or are simply to busy to read bulky articles.
Have a strong summary at the end, where most of the content in the article was condensed into one paragraph for the lazy readers out there.
Hope my contructive criticism is helpfull.