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April 30, 2013, 05:00:48 AM |
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Boot’s Black shadow hovers over
Head
Twenty-six-point-five Till the snake’s head
Blood
Running droplets stream Out the neck
River
The boot on the snake’s head
The black boots on the sidewalk
Door to door Street to street House to house
No where to run
Just hope they don’t come inside
Close the windows
Close the doors
Cover your ears
Close your eyes
Repeat after me
This is not my country This is not my country This is not my country
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April 30, 2013, 07:32:46 AM |
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So... what you're saying is you're the snake?
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Templeton (OP)
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April 30, 2013, 06:13:35 PM |
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So... what you're saying is you're the snake?
not quite When the boot crushed the snake's head, the other boots came out on the street: from them I hide and fear that this is no longer my country.
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May 01, 2013, 02:06:02 AM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
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myrkul
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May 01, 2013, 02:27:03 AM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast.
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May 01, 2013, 04:22:19 AM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. You mean near the Potomac?
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myrkul
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May 01, 2013, 04:25:26 AM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. You mean near the Potomac? Yup, some very dangerous vipers on the shores of the Potomac.
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May 01, 2013, 11:26:14 AM |
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Constructive criticism: If you're going to devote entire stanzas to single words, make sure those words are damn compelling.
I always have found that snakes try to move out of the way of the incoming boot.
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May 01, 2013, 03:15:55 PM |
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Constructive criticism: If you're going to devote entire stanzas to single words, make sure those words are damn compelling.
Thanks Which one didn't work for you?
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May 01, 2013, 03:16:58 PM |
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Constructive criticism: If you're going to devote entire stanzas to single words, make sure those words are damn compelling.
I always have found that snakes try to move out of the way of the incoming boot. If recent events prove anything, a snake won't move out of the way of a boot if it doesn't see it coming.
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May 01, 2013, 03:36:33 PM |
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Aren't snakes usually the seedy, creepy, in the shadows types, like some politicians and such? Why should we feel sorry for them being stomped? Or is this an animal abuse issue, where people are stomping snakes, and this says that that's a bad thing, which I'd totally agree with (snakes are nice)
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May 01, 2013, 04:11:41 PM |
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May 01, 2013, 04:16:24 PM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. They prefer to be called democrats.
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myrkul
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May 01, 2013, 04:19:14 PM |
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Now, one thing I don't get. Are you implying that the marathon was the snake? I think it would be a much more powerful, and less... hmm... terroristic if the poem simply started at "Black boots on the sidewalk" But that's just me, and maybe I don't get the message of the first half of the poem.
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May 01, 2013, 04:25:03 PM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. They prefer to be called democrats. And republicans. Don't forget those. As for snake, maybe it's the "don't tread on me" thing like on the tea party flags?
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May 01, 2013, 04:27:31 PM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. They prefer to be called democrats. And republicans. Don't forget those. As for snake, maybe it's the "don't tread on me" thing like on the tea party flags? Yes, gop and dems, not much difference. The flag should not be attributed to the tea party just because they wave it around. It was from somewhere else.
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May 01, 2013, 04:29:50 PM |
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So, don't live in southwest USA, Australia, north Africa, or other places that are full of snakes?
There are a surprising number of snakes in the northeast. They prefer to be called democrats. And republicans. Don't forget those. As for snake, maybe it's the "don't tread on me" thing like on the tea party flags? Yes, gop and dems, not much difference. The flag should not be attributed to the tea party just because they wave it around. It was from somewhere else. The Gadsden flag was almost the US flag, before The Stars and Stripes was adopted.
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May 01, 2013, 06:26:05 PM |
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The Gadsden flag was almost the US flag, before The Stars and Stripes was adopted.
I'm glad it wasn't. It really looks too much like a picture of a turd
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May 01, 2013, 06:30:16 PM |
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The Gadsden flag was almost the US flag, before The Stars and Stripes was adopted.
I'm glad it wasn't. It really looks too much like a picture of a turd LOL At least the snake is uncoiled a bit. If it were all coiled up, it would look even worse. Of course, the message is the same, either way. Step on me, and you're going to have a bad day.
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May 01, 2013, 06:33:37 PM |
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The Gadsden flag was almost the US flag, before The Stars and Stripes was adopted.
I'm glad it wasn't. It really looks too much like a picture of a turd LOL At least the snake is uncoiled a bit. If it were all coiled up, it would look even worse. Of course, the message is the same, either way. Step on me, and you're going to have a bad day. When I see it and think about someone stepping on it, the only thing I think of is *SPROING!* and someone bouncing off like Sonic off a spring platform.
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